Review this draft against the supplied source and task.
For each material mistake, quote the affected draft phrase, point to
the source passage, explain the changed meaning and propose a correction.
Prioritise the errors that affect the reader's decision.
Explain one useful technique I can apply on the next attempt.
Do not give generic praise, a numerical grade or invented source evidence.
Keep sound parts of the draft rather than rewriting everything.

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For the most important finding, show: source condition, draft claim,
why the difference matters, corrected wording and the next prompt rule.
Keep the correction no stronger than the source. If the source is
ambiguous, give the specific question needed rather than choosing a fact.

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The draft changed 'proposed 15 October, subject to approval' into
'launches 15 October'. Restore both the proposed status and approval
condition. Preserve the useful short format. Show the corrected sentence
and the source link, then check other dates for the same compression error.
Do not invent who will approve it or say approval has occurred.
